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Rough Draft: The Complexity of Traumatic Memory





      My professor, Mrs. Gordiva, pointed out several missing "puzzle pieces" that my polished essay now has. Her comments are displayed below and mainly consist of relating the information back to how it applies to and affects the real world. I was struggling with finding a strong relation between the researched information and current application but knew I wanted to relate it to criminal investigation. My professor guided me to find the exact claim I needed to point to throughout my essay. She then suggested I point to that claim in every paragraph. My polished draft a addresses all suggestions made. 



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