Rough Draft: The Complexity of Traumatic Memory

My professor, Mrs. Gordiva, pointed out several missing "puzzle pieces" that my polished essay now has. Her comments are displayed below and mainly consist of relating the information back to how it applies to and affects the real world. I was struggling with finding a strong relation between the researched information and current application but knew I wanted to relate it to criminal investigation. My professor guided me to find the exact claim I needed to point to throughout my essay. She then suggested I point to that claim in every paragraph. My polished draft a addresses all suggestions made.

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Final Reflection

The purpose of the final reflection is to inform my audience of an overview of all I have completed in this my Composition II class. I address all three projects geared to displaying how they could be applied to the six learning outcomes. I also give an example of the challenges and strengths that this class revealed. I end the essay off with the overall benefit of the class. Final Reflection Over the past semester in English Composition II, we have completed three main projects. There were six learning outcomes expected for the students to achieve and I believe that I conquered them all. The first learning outcome was to “respond appropriately to various rhetorical situations, purposes, and audiences”. The second learning outcome was to “use writing and reading for inquiry, learning, thinking and communicating”. Another learning outcome I was able to master was to use other’s ideas and “integrate” them into my writings. The fourth learning outcome that...

Rough Draft: When You Know Better You do Better

My unedited version of my persuasive argument had a lot of work to be done! My peer editors highlighted my higher order concern as needing to be more direct when it came to my thoughts and claim (thesis). They also pointed out the need to give light on what social media is already doing to help censor certain adult themes and protect children's development. Lower order concerns stated by my peer editors were grammar, punctuation and spacing. I went through and developed a stronger thesis, corrected my LOC's and tied my essay up with a strong ending claim to to thesis. Persuasive Argument “ As teens have started spending less time together, they have become less likely to kill one another, and more likely to kill themselves” (Klass, “When Social Media Is Really Problematic for Adolescents”) . Have you ever looked at your phone and felt a negative emotion or struggled with your mental health bec...

Rhetorical Analysis: H&M Commercial, "She's a Lady"

My rhetorical analysis project was based on the ad “She’s a Lady” produced by H&M. This ad addresses the modern appeal to the popular skepticism of the traditional expectations of what makes a woman a woman. H&M addresses this topic of feminism through displaying and encouraging body diversity, freedom of expression and opinion. This advertisement is geared towards women of all ages but naturally attracts the younger crowd of women because of the twenty-first-century values weaved throughout the video. Something that stood out about my project was that I chose an advertisement that didn’t cause a negative emotion but a more empowering advertisement that politely challenged the concept of woman. She's a... Lady? What is woman? Is she delicate or strong? Is she black, white, Latino? Is she poised and put together? Does she wear size four or fourteen? From “She’s a Lady” by H&M, we can see the modern appeal to the popular skepticism of the traditional...

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