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Exploratory Essay: Reflection


This is a reflection of Project 3 that goes over just a few of the important choices I made while exploring the topic of a growth mindset. It also demonstrates how I came upon a more specific topic and my stance on it. 

Project 3 Reflection, Mind over Bias 
The first decision I made was on the general idea I wanted to write about. I knew I had experience with a growth-mindset and how effective it was in my educational pursuit. As I continued to expand on the topic of the effectiveness of a growth mindset is, I ran into some “theory-holes” (holes in the theory of the growth mindset, that is). So, I decided to explore the defects of implementing the power of mindsets in the classroom. Once I realized there was a gap in the power of the mindset, I discovered the specific topic of my essay and my stance on the subject matter. My rough draft was just my article summaries patched together in a somewhat cohesive way with an introduction and conclusion. What I decided it lacked based on my peer’s revision was clarity in the ideas presented, clarity in my stance and clarity on the direction the essay was going. So, I went back through and simplified and split up complex sentences. I also further defined quotes from other sources. Based on my professor’s suggestion, I weaved and related the final idea and stance throughout the essay to further its cohesiveness. All of my revisions were to help my audience have a clearer idea and understanding of this topic and I believe that was accomplished.  

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