Rhetorical Analysis: Rough Draft with Peer Edits

Shown below are the suggestions by peers in order to make my paper easier to understand and meet the expectations of the project requirements. From every one of my peers, I was told to make sure I clearly state what H&M defines a woman. They also suggested that I give more examples from the past of what woman was to society. I edited my paper based on those two big suggestions. My peers also gave me very encouraging comments that helped me feel more confident in the advertisement I picked because I was skeptical of it due to the difficulty of how many themes there was in the video.

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